Howard @ Frimley

   

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The scary story  [Brought by the House next door!]

BOOM one night there was 3 kids and 1 old lady and house. hey stop the story for a bit what are we talking about WHY DO I ALWAYS TELL YOU WHAT WE ARE TALKING ABOUT! Never mind. Okay. they were Named. Howard,Tane,Kaea and the old Man was called Big toe . Hey stop the story we need snacks fine what one ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm! FRIES since it's friday fine we will have 200 Scoops of chips please. That will be $200

Dollers! ARE YOU KIDDING ME HERE YOU GO SIR! Thanks have a good day. Okay back to the story! There were walking around THEN the kids said look there is a fire barrel BOOM ow. Im cold im gonna go in that house there

Wait a minute Don't go in there Tane it's a haunted house you're just bluffing it's looking at you AHHHHHHHHHHH! Watch out BOOM

I just survived! Stop the story What you have to pay the bill how much $1,000,000,000.

Done back to the story so the old man said GET OUT OF THE HOUSE! And we say:ok and why do you keep stealing our stuff! Ummmmmmmm never mind. Time for dinner boys. COMING Well let’s     go! Hey kids want some lollie’s.

Sorry but we have to go now. Hey stop grabbing us MUM HELP! Whaaa!?

Oh no! Where trapped wwe gotta find a way outta here. HAHAHAHAHAHA! Now i'm gonna cook you for dinner. Guy’s  There’s Two option outta here1 Escaping 2 Calling for help Me and Tane vote for option 1 so what do you think kaea? Fine option 1. We need to make a squad Im Delta team 1 Tane your Delta team2 And kaea your Delta team 3 Okay take these what are these!? This is a radio we can talk to each other far away. Ok let’s roll out. Delta 2 do you copy loud and and clear where’s the exit far to my right. Okay delta 2 out Delta 3 you there delta 3 do you copy  Delta 2 delta 3 is executed. AHHHHHHHHHHHH!? Guy’s im been captured is that you Delta 3!?

Yes He blocked the exit We are doomed

How long has it been! BOOM hey the wall just blow up know we can go in the woods and camp there and eat some Bacon and waffles!

THE END!

PART 2 COMING SOON!